I agree with Wayne, you need to add more details. Your straight to the point though so thats good. I also believe that you should add more effects that drinking have on teens.
People have been talking about the end of the world for sometime now, and I think it's time to start thinking about how to survive Doomsday. Personally, I think our main concern is our government turning off the power, due to debt and unstable order. Here is some materials (Items I already have for survival.) you can use to survive.
1. A gun: Protection and for hunting bird, deer, rabbit, etc.
2. A Knife: For deffense, cutting meat, and food, cutting rope, etc.
3.A coal or wood buring grill: To boil water and cook food.
4. Fruit and vegitable seeds: Grow food crops.
5. Gardening Tools.
6. Pots and pans: For cooking and boiling water.
7. Salt: Preserving meat.
8. Rubbing alcohol: For sanitation and treating wounds.
9. Am/FM radio
10. Items for fire: Matches, lighters, flint, etc.
11. Stay in your house for shelter! Vever leave your house, unless you need to evacuate. If you need to evacuate, take a portable tent.
You should add more detail to make it more interesting or different vocabulary but i agree with your opinion.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Wayne, you need to add more details. Your straight to the point though so thats good. I also believe that you should add more effects that drinking have on teens.
ReplyDeleteAdd more support and details to make your argument more compelling.
ReplyDeleteI Didn't Know Either. But I See We Have Similar Views On The Topic.
ReplyDeleteAt least your point is clear. *shrug*
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